Homework: News Report
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UPDATE! Don't do the exercises under VOCABULARY - Reporting verbs
YOUR TASK: Write a news report about an event (a concert in your city, a piece of news, a football match, an exhibition,...)
Be careful! Before you begin, take a look at the steps you must follow:
Once you have posted your own composition, you must correct the composition which is above yours.
Deadline: Tuesday, 1st April at 20:00 (you can do it before!)
Copy and paste the composition you have to correct in a comment under the original one. Then make your corrections. Follow these steps:
YOUR TASK: Write a news report about an event (a concert in your city, a piece of news, a football match, an exhibition,...)
You must include:
Title
100-150 words
2 connectors of Cause and Effect
1 sentence in Reported Speech
1 n̲e̲w̲ reporting verb
Title
100-150 words
2 connectors of Cause and Effect
1 sentence in Reported Speech
1 n̲e̲w̲ reporting verb
Be careful! Before you begin, take a look at the steps you must follow:
- 1. Read the example and the tips in your booklet -> WRITING: A News Report
- F̲i̲n̲d̲ in the text the main information (look at the chart) about the article "Girl Accidentally Invites 15,000 Facebook Friends to Party".
- 2. Don't forget the linking words! You can find some Connectors of cause and Effect under Improve your writing
- It's a good idea to practise their use by doing exercise 2 (optional).
- 3. Perhaps you need to report someone's words
- Learn some new reporting verbs at VOCABULARY: Reporting verbs.
- 4. Write a draft of your news report
- Use the pattern in the right page.
- 5. Type and post your writing in this blog
- Use the comments below this entry. Don't forget your name!
Once you have posted your own composition, you must correct the composition which is above yours.
Deadline: Tuesday, 1st April at 20:00 (you can do it before!)
Copy and paste the composition you have to correct in a comment under the original one. Then make your corrections. Follow these steps:
- If something is very good, u̲n̲d̲e̲r̲l̲i̲n̲e̲ ̲i̲t̲.
- If you want to add something, write it in CAPITAL LETTERS.
- If something is wrong, s̶t̶r̶i̶k̶e̶ ̶i̶t̶ ̶t̶h̶r̶o̶u̶g̶h̶ and try to write it correctly. You can use this tool to cross out and to underline your corrections.
On Wednesday, 2nd April every blog entry should look like this:
Categories: homework, News report
I'm sorry but I did not include a reported speech sentence in that writing, so I write it down another time including it:
ResponderEliminarMe and my family decided to travel to another country. We noticed that we had never been in Italy, and due to that we decided to go to Rome in April holidays. We made our suitcases and toke a plane to the Italian capital.
We knew that Rome had a great history, and because of this we went to many history museums and famous landmarks as the Coliseum. We also enjoyed Italian food, which is delicious. When we ate in a restaurant in the city centre, my dad said that this was the best calzone he had never tasted!
We enjoyed this city for a week and we finally toke a return plane to Spain. Now we have got a great memory of this trip and many stories to tell to our friends.
Me and my family decided to travel to another country. We noticed that we had never been in Italy, and due to that we decided to go to Rome in April h̶o̶l̶i̶d̶a̶y̶s̶ holiday. We made our suitcases and toke a plane to the Italian capital.
EliminarWe knew that Rome h̶a̶d̶ has a great history, and because of this we went to many history museums and famous landmarks as the Coliseum. ̶W̶e̶ ̶a̶l̶s̶o̶ Also we enjoyed Italian food, which is delicious. When we ate in a restaurant in the city centre, m̲y̲ ̲d̲a̲d̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲i̲s̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲s̲t̲ ̲c̲a̲l̲z̲o̲n̲e̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ ̲n̲e̲v̲e̲r̲ ̲t̲a̲s̲t̲e̲d̲!̲ ̲
We enjoyed this city for a week and we finally toke a return plane to Spain. Now we have got a great memory of this trip and many stories to tell to our friends.
Manu, although it is well written this is not exactly a news report! Thanks, Elena, for your comments!
EliminarM̶e̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ My family and I decided to travel to another country. We noticed that we had never been in/TO Italy, and due to that we decided to go to Rome in April h̶o̶l̶i̶d̶a̶y̶s̶ holiday. We made our suitcases and t̶o̶k̶e̶ took a plane to the Italian capital.
We knew that Rome had a great history, and because of t̶h̶i̶s̶ that we went to many history museums and famous landmarks as the Coliseum. We also enjoyed Italian food, w̲h̲i̲c̲h̲ is delicious. When we ate in a restaurant in the city centre, m̲y̲ ̲d̲a̲d̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̶h̶i̶s̶ ̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ t̲h̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲s̲t̲ ̲c̲a̲l̲z̲o̲n̲e̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ ̲n̲e̲v̲e̲r̲ ̲t̲a̲s̲t̲e̲d̲!̲ ̲
We enjoyed this city for a week and we finally t̶o̶k̶e̶ took a return plane to Spain. Now we have got a great memory of this trip and many stories to tell t̶o̶ our friends.
Elena Mas.
ResponderEliminarTEENAGERS AND CRIME.
Most teenagers get into trouble sometimes but there is a difference between do something wrong and commit a crime. Often teenager make shoplifting because of the clothes, they haven't got to much money for them so they steal.
When a young person breaks the law and gets away with it, they are going to repeat it. But I think that sending them to the prision isn't the best idea for young people. A policeman said that the best punishment is getting them to do community service like pick up rubish of the streets.
I agree with the policeman but if we don´t do something soon the teenage crime is going to rise and it is a problem for our society.
TEENAGERS AND CRIME.
EliminarMost teenagers get into trouble sometimes but there is a difference between do something wrong and commit a crime. Often teenager make shoplifting because of the clothes, they haven't got to much money for them so they steal.
When a young person breaks the law and gets away with it, they are going to repeat it. But I think that sending them to the prision isn't the best idea for young people. A̲ ̲p̲o̲l̲i̲c̲e̲m̲a̲n̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲s̲t̲ ̲p̲u̲n̲i̲s̲h̲m̲e̲n̲t̲ ̲i̲s̲ ̲g̲e̲t̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲m̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲d̲o̲ ̲c̲o̲m̲m̲u̲n̲i̲t̲y̲ ̲s̲e̲r̲v̲i̲c̲e̲ ̲l̲i̲k̲e̲ ̲p̲i̲c̲k̲ ̲u̲p̲ ̲r̲u̲b̲i̲s̲h̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲s̲t̲r̲e̲e̲t̲s̲..
I agree with the policeman but if we don´t do something soon the teenage crime is going to rise and it is a problem for our society.
Thanks for your corrections, José! Elena, this is rather an opinion article, isn't it?
EliminarMost teenagers get into trouble sometimes b̲u̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲i̲s̲ ̲a̲ ̲d̲i̲f̲f̲e̲r̲e̲n̲c̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲t̲w̲e̲e̲n̲ doING something wrong and commitING a crime. Often teenagerS make shoplifting because of the clothes, they haven't got toO much money/MONEY ENOUGH for them so they steal THEM.
When a young person b̲r̲e̲a̲k̲s̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲l̲a̲w̲ and gets away with i̶t̶ some piece of clothes, they are going to / WILL repeat it. B̶u̶t̶ However I think that sending them to t̶h̶e̶ prision isn't the best idea for young people. A̲ ̲p̲o̲l̲i̲c̲e̲m̲a̲n̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲b̲e̲s̲t̲ ̲p̲u̲n̲i̲s̲h̲m̲e̲n̲t̲ ̲i̶s̶ was g̲e̲t̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲m̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲d̲o̲ ̲c̲o̲m̲m̲u̲n̲i̲t̲y̲ ̲s̲e̲r̲v̲i̲c̲e̲ ̲l̲i̲k̲e̲ ̲p̲i̲c̲k̲ING ̲u̲p̲ ̲r̲u̲b̲i̲s̲h̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲s̲t̲r̲e̲e̲t̲s̲.
I agree with the policeman but if we don´t do something soon the teenage crime is going to rise and it is a problem for our society.
The lost plane of Malaysia Jose Nadal
ResponderEliminarThe Malaysia Airlines flight MH370 from Kuala Lumpur took off with 239 people going to Beijing and disappeared from radar Malaysia about 40 minutes after the take off.
The Australian Authorities today confirmed that the items in the water off the coast of Australia don't belong to the Malaysian plane disappeared.
The search of the aircraft in an area of 319,000 square kilometers will continue if weather conditions permit
Today are going to send nine military plans of Australia, China, South Korea, United States, Malaysia, Canada and Japan, and one civilian.
In the search area are already the Australian ship Success and three other ships of China and is expected to arrive today six ships more to the area for search and pick up the items.
The Malaysia Airlines flight MH370 from Kuala Lumpur took off with 239 people going to Beijing and disappeared from radar Malaysia about 40 minutes after the take off.
EliminarThe Australian Authorities today confirmed that the items in the water off the coast of Australia don't belong to the Malaysian plane disappeared.
The search of the aircraft in an area of 319,000 square kilometers will continue if weather conditions permit
Today are going to send nine military plans of Australia, China, South Korea, United States, Malaysia, Canada and Japan, and one civilian.
In the search area are already the Australian ship and three other ships of China and is S⃥u⃥c⃥c⃥e⃥s⃥s⃥ to arrive today six ships more to the area for search and pick up the items.
Such an up-to-date topic, José! Antonio was very benevolent, wasn't he?
EliminarThe Malaysia Airlines flight MH370 from Kuala Lumpur took off with 239 p̲e̲o̲p̲l̲e̲ ̲g̲o̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲o̲ Beijing and disappeared from MalaysiaN radar about 40 minutes after the take-off.
T̶h̶e̶ Australian authorities t̶o̶d̶a̶y̶ c̲o̲n̲f̲i̲r̲m̲e̲d̲ TODAY that the items in the water off̶ the Australian coast o̶f̶ ̶A̶u̶s̶t̶r̶a̶l̶i̶a̶ ̶d̶o̶n̶'̶t̶ didn't b̲e̲l̲o̲n̲g̲ ̲t̲o̲ the disappeared Malaysian plane d̶i̶s̶a̶p̶p̶e̶a̶r̶e̶d̶.
The search of the aircraft in an area of 319,000 square kilometers will continue if weather conditions permit IT.
Today AUSTRALIAN AUTHORITIES are going to send nine military planEs o̶f̶ from Australia, China, South Korea, United States, Malaysia, Canada and Japan, and o̶n̶e̶ a civilian one. // TODAY NINE MILITARY PLANES FROM [...] WILL BE SENT.
In the search area THERE are already the Australian ship and three other ships o̶f̶ from China and i̶s̶ ̶S̶⃥̶u̶⃥̶c̶⃥̶c̶⃥̶e̶⃥̶s̶⃥̶s̶⃥̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶a̶r̶r̶i̶v̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶d̶a̶y̶ ̶s̶i̶x̶ ̶s̶h̶i̶p̶s̶ ̶m̶o̶r̶e̶ today six more ships are expected to arrive to the area f̶o̶r̶ to search and pick up the items.
THE HANGOVER OF "EL CLÁSICO"
ResponderEliminarLast sunday nigth Real Madrid and Barcelona played a match which decide that Barcelona can play for the tittle or Madrid and Atlétco could be the only teams who can win the league.
The match begins very exciting in the first minutes because Andrés Iniesta scored a goal in the 7th minute. The match looked favorably for Barça but in the 20th minutes two fails of Mascherano allowed Madrid to advance in the bookmark with two goals of Benzema. Before the first part ends Messi scored a goal and put the draw in the bookmark.
In the second part the referee whistle a penalty for Real Madrid who didn't exist because the fault of Dani Alves were out of the area. After of them the referee whistle two penalties for Barcelona who wons the match.
After the match Cristiano Rorando said that the people didn't want the Madrid won the league.
Sergio Ramos also said that this referee was very bad.
In my opinio Barça deserved to win the match.
THE HANGOVER OF "EL CLÁSICO"
EliminarLast sunday night Real Madrid and Barcelona played a match which decides that Barcelona can play for the tittle or Madrid and Atlético could be the only teams who can win the league.
The match begins very exciting in the first minutes because Andrés Iniesta scored a goal in the 7th minute. The match looked favorably for Barça but in the 20th minutes two fails of Mascherano allowed Madrid to advance in the bookmark with two goals of Benzema. Before the first part ends Messi scored a goal and put the draw in the bookmark.
In the second part the referee whistled a penalty for Real Madrid who didn't exist because the fault of Dani Alves was out of the area. After of them the referee whistled two penalties for Barcelona who won the match.
After the match Cristiano Ronaldo said that the people didn't want the Madrid won the league.
Sergio Ramos also said that this referee was very bad.
In my opinion Barça deserved to win the match.
Thanks for your corrections, Miguel (next time, please use the correction criteria, I almost went crazy to find them) ! Antonio, it's a good idea to relate hobbies to homework! Well done!
EliminarLast sunday night Real Madrid and Barcelona played a match w̲h̲i̲c̲h̲ decideD t̶h̶a̶t̶ whether Barcelona c̶a̶n̶ could play for the t̶i̶t̶t̶l̶e̶ title or Madrid and AtlétIco could be the only teams w̶h̶o̶ that can win the league.
The match b̶e̶g̶i̶n̶s̶ very exciting in the first minutes because Andrés Iniesta s̲c̲o̲r̲e̲d̲ ̲a̲ ̲g̲o̲a̲l̲ in the 7th minute. The match looked f̶a̶v̶o̶r̶a̶b̶l̶y̶ favourable for Barça but in the 20th minutes̶ two f̶a̶i̶l̶s̶ errors/mistakes of Mascherano allowed Madrid to advance/GO AHEAD in the b̶o̶o̶k̶m̶a̶r̶k̶ scoreboard with two goals of Benzema. Before the first part/HALF e̶n̶d̶s̶ ended Messi scored a goal and p̲u̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲d̲r̲a̲w̲ in the b̶o̶o̶k̶m̶a̶r̶k̶ scoreboard.
In the second part/HALF the referee w̲h̲i̲s̲t̲l̲e̲D̲ a penalty for Real Madrid w̶h̶o̶ which didn't exist because t̶h̶e̶ Dani Alves' fault o̶f̶ ̶D̶a̶n̶i̶ ̶A̶l̶v̶e̶s̶ w̶e̶r̶e̶ was out of the area. After o̶f̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶m̶ it, the referee whistleD two penalties for Barcelona who wons̶ the match.
After the match, Cristiano Ronaldo said that the people didn't want t̶h̶e̶ Madrid w̶o̶n̶ to win the league.
Sergio Ramos also said that t̶h̶i̶s̶ that referee was very bad.
In my opinioN Barça deserved to win the match.
Miguel Torrregrosa
ResponderEliminarReturns the Black Raven
Yesterday, 30 of july the famous gang of theves "Black Raven" have robbed in a jewellery shop in the city center. This gang is famous because they have committed many robberies since a year ago. Their first robbery was in Brighton were the hijacked a bus and they killed three policemen. This gang is called the phantom gang because police could never arrested them.
Two men have stolen jewelery and money of amount of $30000 and shot two guards, one of them is unconscious and they robbed people inside. They escape from centre with a car that they had robbed before. Police have lost their sight. It's known that they are from he gang because a witness said that they have worn a raven in their jackets, is the gang's sign.
The chief of the police said that they were investigating and the gang would be punished. But people didn't belive him because thy are afraid and they think they are in danger.
Miguel Torrregrosa
EliminarReturns the Black Raven
Yesterday, 30 of july the famous gang of t̶h̶e̶v̶e̶s̶ " Black Raven" h̶a̶v̶e̶ ̶r̶o̶b̶b̶e̶d̶ in a jewellery shop in the city center. This gang is famous because they have committed many robberies since a year ago. Their first robbery was in Brighton were the hijacked a bus and they killed three policemen. This gang is called the phantom gang because police could never arrested them.
Two men have (had) stolen jewelery and money of amount of $30000 and shot two guards, one of them is unconscious and they robbed people inside. They escapeD from centre with a car that they had robbed before. Police have lost their sight. It's known that they are from he gang because a̲ ̲w̲i̲t̲n̲e̲s̲s̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲y̲ ̲h̲a̲v̲e̲ ̲w̲o̲r̲n̲ ̲a̲ ̲r̲a̲v̲e̲n̲ ̲i̲n̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲i̲r̲ ̲j̲a̲c̲k̲e̲t̲s̲ is the gang's sign.
T̲h̲e̲ ̲c̲h̲i̲e̲f̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲p̲o̲l̲i̲c̲e̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲y̲ ̲w̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲i̲n̲v̲e̲s̲t̲i̲g̲a̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲g̲a̲n̲g̲ ̲w̲o̲u̲l̲d̲ ̲b̲e̲ ̲p̲u̲n̲i̲s̲h̲e̲d̲.̲But people didn´t belive him because thEy are afraid and they think they are in danger
Good corrections, Álvaro! Interesting constructions, congratulations, Miguel!
EliminarYesterday, 30th o̶f̶ July the famous gang of t̶h̶e̶v̶e̶s̶ thieves " Black Raven" h̶a̶v̶e̶ robbed i̶n̶ ̶a̶ jewellery shop in the city center. This gang is famous because they have committed many robberies since 2012 a̶ ̶y̶e̶a̶r̶ ̶a̶g̶o̶. Their first robbery was in Brighton were theY h̲i̲j̲a̲c̲k̲e̲d̲ ̲a̲ ̲b̲u̲s̲ and they killed three policemen. This gang i̲s̲ ̲c̲a̲l̲l̲e̲d̲ the phantom gang because police could never arreste̶d̶ them.
Two men h̶a̶v̶e̶ ̶(̶h̶a̶d̶)̶ stolen̶ jeweLLery and money o̶f̶ IN/TO THE amount of $30000 and shot two guards, one of them is unconscious and they robbed people inside. They escapeD from THE PLACE c̶e̶n̶t̶r̶e̶ with a car that they had robbed before. P̲̲̲o̲̲̲l̲̲̲i̲̲̲c̲̲̲e̲̲̲ ̲̲̲h̲̲̲a̲̲̲v̲̲̲e̲̲̲ ̲l̲o̲s̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲i̲r̲ ̲s̲i̲g̲h̲t̲. I̲t̲'̲s̲ ̲k̲n̲o̲w̲n̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ they are from The gang because a̲ ̲w̲i̲t̲n̲e̲s̲s̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲y̲ ̲h̶̶̲a̶̶̲v̶̶̲e̶̶̲ ̲ HAD w̲o̲r̲n̲ ̲a̲ ̲r̲a̲v̲e̲n̲ ̲i̲n̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲i̲r̲ ̲j̲a̲c̲k̲e̲t̲s̲, WHICH is the g̲a̲n̲g̲'̲s̲ ̲s̲i̲g̲n̲.
T̲h̲e̲ ̲c̲h̲i̲e̲f̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲t̶h̶e̶ ̲p̲o̲l̲i̲c̲e̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲y̲ ̲w̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲i̲n̲v̲e̲s̲t̲i̲g̲a̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲g̲a̲n̲g̲ ̲w̲o̲u̲l̲d̲ ̲b̲e̲ ̲p̲u̲n̲i̲s̲h̲e̲d̲. B̶u̶t However people didn´t belive him because thEy are afraid and they think they are in danger.
Pablo Mazón
ResponderEliminarMarch for Dignity(22th March)
Last weekend in Madrid more than 2,000,000 people of all the Spanish provinces went out to the street for a demonstration. They said that they want job, bread, home and no more cuts in the education sector.
It was the 22th of March in the capital city of Spain, a lot of people of the country went out to claim for his rights. Eventhought the protesters were peaceful, riots beat them. During the marches, the pickets were tweeting photos of the banners and the way that the media in Spain lies about the March by the hashtag "#22M".
Media said the following day that the protesters were radical people who only want to destabilize the State and the lied too about the people who went to the Marches.
Finally, the protesters get what they want, to be heard.
22nd xd
EliminarThat's right, in time correction, Pablo!
EliminarAndrea Pomares Palomares
EliminarMarch for Dignity (2̶2̶t̶h̶ 22nd of March)
Last weekend in Madrid, more than 2,000,000 people of all the Spanish provinces went out to the street f̶o̶r̶ to hold a demonstration. They said that they want job, bread, home and no more cuts in the education sector.
It was the 2̶2̶t̶h̶ 22nd of March in the capital city of Spain, a lot of people of the country went out to claim for his rights. E̶v̶e̶n̶t̶h̶o̶u̶g̶h̶t̶ Even though the protesters were peaceful, r̶i̶o̶t̶s̶ anti-riots beat them. During the marches, the pickets were tweeting photos of the banners and the way t̶h̶a̶t̶ the media in Spain lies about the March by the hashtag "#22M".
Media said the following day that the protesters were radical people who only w̶a̶n̶t̶ wanted to destabilize the State and they lied t̶o̶o̶ about the people who went to the Marches too.
Finally, the protesters g̶e̶t̶ got what they w̶a̶n̶t̶ wanted, t̶o̶ ̶b̶e̶ being heard.
Interesting topic, Pablo! Accurate corrections, Andrea!
EliminarMarch for Dignity (2̶2̶t̶h̶ 22nd o̶f̶ March)
Last weekend in Madrid, more than 2,000,000 people o̶f̶ from all the Spanish provinces w̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶o̶u̶t̶ ̶t̶o̶ took the streets f̶o̶r̶ to h̲o̲l̲d̲ ̲a̲ ̲d̲e̲m̲o̲n̲s̲t̲r̲a̲t̲i̲o̲n̲. They said that they wantED job, bread, home and no more cuts in the education sector.
It was the 2̶2̶t̶h̶ 22nd of March in the capital city of Spain, a lot of people of the country went out t̲o̲ ̲c̲l̲a̲i̲m̲ ̲f̲o̲r̲ h̶i̶s̶ their rights. E̶v̶e̶n̶t̶h̶o̶u̶g̶h̶t̶ Even though the protesters were peaceful, r̶i̶o̶t̶s̶ anti-riots/RIOT POLICE beat them. During the marches, the pickets w̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲t̲w̲e̲e̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ photos of the banners and the way t̶h̶a̶t̶ the media in Spain lies about the March (by)/WITH/UNDER/THANKS TO the hashtag "#22M".
Media said the following day that the protesters were radical people who only w̶a̶n̶t̶ wanted to d̲e̲s̲t̲a̲b̲i̲l̲i̲z̲e̲ the State and they lied t̶o̶o̶ about the people who went to the Marches too.
Finally, the protesters g̶e̶t̶ got what they w̶a̶n̶t̶ wanted, to be/being heard.
Andrea Pomares Palomares
ResponderEliminarTHE MURDER
The last week I saw something I had never seen: a very strange murder. I am a policewoman and I investigate crimes. At first, it seemed a crime of passion because the murdered was a beautiful girl that wore a classic dress, and she was in an expensive hotel room. Then we discovered that she did not exist, she did not have any identity or passport.
I thought she could be a spy or a FBI secret agent but no one wanted to tell us who she was.
My boss filed the case but I was interested in knowing what happened, so I continued investigating. It was difficult, but at the end, I discovered the truth.
The murder was not a murder; it was a trick, and everybody believed it.
The woman was not dead; she only pretended it, but, why? Obviously, someone wanted to kill her and she was cleverer.
When I discovered it, the girl came to my house, begging that I was in silence.
No body knows it, only you, my dear diary.
I hope she will be good.
Paloma Martínez
EliminarTHE MURDER
The last week I saw something I had never seen: a very strange murder. I am a policewoman and I investigate crimes. At first, it seemed a c̶r̶i̶m̶e̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶p̶a̶s̶s̶i̶o̶n̶
because the murdered was a beautiful girl that wore a classic dress, and she was in an expensive hotel room. Then we discovered that she did not exist, she did not have any identity or passport.
I thought she could be a spy or a FBI secret agent but no one wanted to tell us who she was.
My boss filed the case but I was interested in knowing what happened, so I continued investigating. It was difficult, but at the end, I discovered the truth.
The murder was not a murder; it was a trick, and everybody believed it.
The woman was not dead; she only pretended it, but, why? Obviously, someone wanted to kill her and she was cleverer.
When I discovered it, the girl came to my house, begging that I was in silence.
No body knows it, only you, my dear diary.
I hope she will be good.
Hard work, Paloma, wasn't it? That's not a news report, Andrea, but... who cares? Is chapter 2 already available?
EliminarTHE MURDER
T̶h̶e̶ Last week I saw something I had never seen: a very strange murder. I am a policewoman and I investigate crimes. A̲t̲ ̲f̲i̲r̲s̲t̲, it seemed a a̲ ̲c̲r̲i̲m̲e̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲p̲a̲s̲s̲i̲o̲n̲ because the murdered was a beautiful girl that wore a classic dress, and she was in a̲n̲ ̲e̲xpensive hotel room. Then we discovered that she did not exist, she did not have any identity or passport. I̲ ̲t̲h̲o̲u̲g̲h̲t̲ ̲s̲h̲e̲ ̲c̲o̲u̲l̲d̲ ̲b̲e̲ a spy or a FBI secret agent but no one wanted to tell us who she was.
My boss f̲i̲l̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲c̲a̲s̲e̲ but I was interested i̲n̲ ̲k̲n̲o̲w̲i̲n̲g̲ what happened, so I continued investigating. It was difficult, but at the end, I discovered the truth.
The murder was not a murder; it was a trick, and everybody believed it.
The woman was not dead; she only pretended it, but, why? Obviously, someone wanted to kill her and she was c̲l̲e̲v̲e̲r̲e̲r̲.
When I discovered it, the girl came to my house, begging me to be t̶h̶a̶t̶ ̶I̶ ̶w̶a̶s̶ in silence.
N̶o̶ ̶b̶o̶d̶y̶ Nobody knows it, only you, my dear diary.
I hope she will be g̶o̶o̶d̶ fine.
Paloma Martínez
ResponderEliminarLast Saturday in Manchester a teenager boy called Arthur Kirkland killed his parents because they talk him to go to a different school in a different city.
This tragic event happened on 23th January, 2012 in the house of the Kirkland family. The boy killed his father first and his mother later. Arthur said that he had done it because his parents had hitten him and they had wanted to change him to other school and he hadn't wanted to meet other people.
Finally the police arrested the boy and took him to an approved school for two years and later he went to a penitentiary for twenty years.
Adrián Gutiérrez.
EliminarLast Saturday in Manchester, a teenager boy called Arthur Kirkland killed his parents because they t̶a̶l̶k̶ ̶h̶i̶m̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶g̶o̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶a̶ ̶d̶i̶f̶f̶e̶r̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶s̶c̶h̶o̶o̶l̶ ̶i̶n̶ ̶a̶ ̶d̶i̶f̶f̶e̶r̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶c̶i̶t̶y̶.̶ talk with Arthur to move him to another school in a different city.
This tragic event happened on 23th January, 2012 in the house of the Kirkland family. The boy killed his father first and his mother later. Arthur said that he had done it because his parents had h̶i̶t̶t̶e̶n̶ ̶ hit him and they had wanted to change him to other school and he hadn't wanted to meet other people.
Finally the police arrested the boy and took him to an approved school for two years and later he went to a penitentiary for twenty years.
Thanks Paloma for your composition! Thanks Adrián for your corrections! Here are mines:
EliminarLast Saturday in Manchester, a teenager (boy) called Arthur Kirkland killed his parents because they t̶a̶l̶k̶ told him t̶o̶ ̶g̶o̶ to a different school in a different city.
This tragic event happened on 23th January, 2012 in the house of the Kirkland family. The boy first killed his father and his mother later. A̲r̲t̲h̲u̲r̲ ̲s̲a̲i̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ ̲d̲o̲n̲e̲ ̲i̲t̲ ̲b̲e̲c̲a̲u̲s̲e̲ ̲h̲i̲s̲ ̲p̲a̲r̲e̲n̲t̲s̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ h̶i̶t̶t̶e̶n̶ h̲i̲t̲ ̲h̲i̲m̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲y̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲ ̲w̲a̲n̲t̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲c̲h̲a̲n̲g̲e̲ ̲h̲i̲m̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲o̲t̲h̲e̲r̲ ̲s̲c̲h̲o̲o̲l̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲h̲a̲d̲n̲'̲t̲ ̲w̲a̲n̲t̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲m̲e̲e̲t̲ ̲o̲t̲h̲e̲r̲ ̲p̲e̲o̲p̲l̲e̲.̲
Finally the police arrested the boy and took him to an approved school for two years and later he went to a penitentiary for twenty years.
Adrián Gutiérrez Ruiz
ResponderEliminarThe worst streak of history.
The 76ers aren`t on his best moment, nowadays they got the worst defeats streak of the Philadelphia franchise`s history.
The 76ers ties the worst streak of the history of the NBA (established by Cleveland Cavaliers in 2011) and they establish the worst streak of the franchise with 26 consecutive defeats. 76ers don't won since 29/1/14. The record was established the last night when finally the team of Philadelphia won the match against Detroit in Wells Fargo Center.
The result of the match against Detroit Pistons was: DET 98-123 PHI. The Philadelphia's GM said that the team had broken a bad streak therefore the fans had to be happy.
Dniel Serrano correction
EliminarThe worst streak of history.
The 76ers aren`t on his best moment, nowadays they got the worst defeats streak of the Philadelphia franchise`s history.
The 76ers ties the worst streak of the history of the NBA (established by Cleveland Cavaliers in 2011) and they establish-e-d the worst streak of the franchise with 26 consecutive defeats. 76ers d-o-n-'-t w-o-n HAVEN'T WON since 29/1/14. The record was established the last night when finally the team of Philadelphia won the match against Detroit in Wells Fargo Center.
The result of the match against Detroit Pistons was: DET 98-123 PHI. The Philadelphia's GM said that the team had broken a bad streak therefore the fans had to be happy.
Thanks for your corrections, Dani! Adrián, it's a good idea to relate hobbies to homework! Next time try to use synonyms!
EliminarThe worst streak of history.
The 76ers aren't on h̶i̶s̶ their best moment, nowadays they g̶o̶t̶ are on the w̲o̲r̲s̲t̲ ̲d̲e̲f̲e̲a̲t̲s̲ ̲s̲t̲r̲e̲a̲k̲ of the Philadelphia franchise's history.
The 76ers ties̶ the worst streak of the history of the NBA (established by Cleveland Cavaliers in 2011) and they establishED the worst streak of the franchise with 26 consecutive defeats. 76ers d̶o̶n̶'̶t̶ ̶w̶o̶n̶ HAVEN'T WON s̲i̲n̲c̲e̲ ̲2̲9̲/̲1̲/̲1̲4̲. The record was established (? - broken) t̶h̶e̶ last night when f̶i̶n̶a̶l̶l̶y̶ the team of Philadelphia finally won the match against Detroit in Wells Fargo Center.
The result of the match against Detroit Pistons was: DET 98-123 PHI. The Philadelphia's GM said that the team had broken a bad streak t̲h̲e̲r̲e̲f̲o̲r̲e̲ the fans had to be happy.
Daniel Serrano
ResponderEliminarA few days after Jeremy, a terribly agressive teenager scaped from the asylum situated otside Indianapolis, Indiana; the city has began a very dangerous city and people should not go out of their houses.
This boy entered to the asylum at age of 14 because he had an pshyco attack and he almost kill lots of people at the mall of the city. When he entered, he promised that if one day he reach to escape from the mental hospital he would kill anyone he sees. As a result of the threats he was under duty and he couldn't go out of his room. Now he is a strong 18 years old man and unfortunately last week he scaped and therefore all the city of Illinos are quite scared because now he is bigger and more dangerous.
Finally, after days of hard searching, police has arrested the man at the time he was going to commit a murder.
Lucía Ortega
EliminarA few days after Jeremy, a terribly (agressive) aggressive teenager (scaped) escaped from the asylum situated (otside) outside Indianapolis, Indiana; the city has began a very dangerous city and people should not go out of their houses.
This boy entered to the asylum at age of 14 because he had an a (pshyco) physic attack and he almost kill lots of people at the mall of the city. When he entered, he promised that if one day he reachES to escape from the mental hospital he would kill anyone he sees. As a result of the threats he was under duty and he couldn't go out of his room. Now he is a strong 18 years old man and unfortunately last week he (scaped) escaped and therefore all the city of (Illinos) Llinos are is quite scared because now he is bigger and more dangerous.
Finally, after days of hard searching, police (has) have arrested the man at the time he was going to commit a murder.
Sorry, I had a problem and I put the corrections in brackets.
Don't worry, Lucía, you are a resourceful girl! Thanks! Terrifying story, Dani!
EliminarA few days after Jeremy, a terribly (agressive) aggressive teenager (scaped) escaped from the asylum situated (otside) outside Indianapolis, Indiana; the city has b̶e̶g̶a̶n̶ BECOME a very dangerous city and people should not go out of their houses.
This boy entered to t̶h̶e̶ asylum at THE age of 14 because he had an a (pshyco) physic attack and he almost killED lots of people at the mall of the city/CITY MALL. When he entered, h̲e̲ ̲p̲r̲o̲m̲i̲s̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲h̲a̲t̲ ̲i̲f̲ ̲o̲n̲e̲ ̲d̲a̲y̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲r̲e̲a̲c̲h̲E̲D̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲e̲s̲c̲a̲p̲e̲ ̲f̲r̲o̲m̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲m̲e̲n̲t̲a̲l̲ ̲h̲o̲s̲p̲i̲t̲a̲l̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲w̲o̲u̲l̲d̲ ̲k̲i̲l̲l̲ ̲a̲n̲y̲o̲n̲e̲ ̲h̲e̲ ̲s̶e̶e̶s̶ saw. A̲s̲ ̲a̲ ̲r̲e̲s̲u̲l̲t̲ ̲o̲f̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲t̲h̲r̲e̲a̲t̲s̲ he was under d̶u̶t̶y̶ surveillance and he couldn't go out of his room. Now he is a strong 18 years old man and unfortunately last week he (scaped) escaped and t̲h̲e̲r̲e̲f̲o̲r̲e̲ all the city of Illinos a̶r̶e̶ is quite scared because now he is b̲i̲g̲g̲e̲r̲ ̲a̲n̲d̲ ̲m̲o̲r̲e̲ ̲d̲a̲n̲g̲e̲r̲o̲u̲s̲.
Finally, after days of hard searching, police (has) h̲a̲v̲e̲ arrested the man at the time he was going to commit a murder.
Lucía Ortega
ResponderEliminarTwo months ago, I was reading the news and I saw an argument describing an experience of a man. He tried to live in another house with all those habits. I thought that it is very interesting and I inscribe on one page for do it.
Last month a woman phoned me for told me that a new house was waiting for me. There was a very big house. The family was made by Mary, the mum, Charlie, the dad, Celia, the sister and John, the little brother. They have a brown dog. They were Muslim.
The first day was a bit difficult because of the food and when it was the pray’s time they had a special clothing. Just as the week was passing I caught familiarity and when the week finished I had four more friends.
Now, the next week they will come to my house for learn all my customs.
Nice experience! Would you do it?
EliminarTwo months ago, I was reading the news and I saw an a̶r̶g̶u̶m̶e̶n̶t̶ article describing a̶n̶ ̶e̶x̶p̶e̶r̶i̶e̶n̶c̶e̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶a̶ ̶m̶a̶n̶ one man's experience. He tried to live in another house with all those (WHICH?) habits. I thought that it i̶s̶ was very interesting and I inscribe on one page f̶o̶r̶ to do it.
Last month a woman phoned/called me f̶o̶r̶ to told me that a new house w̲a̲s̲ ̲w̲a̲i̲t̲i̲n̲g̲ ̲f̲o̲r̲ ̲m̲e̲. T̶h̶e̶r̶e̶ It was a very big house. The family was made by Mary, the mum, Charlie, the dad, Celia, the sister and John, the little brother. They h̶a̶v̶e̶ a brown dog. They were Muslim.
The first day was a bit difficult b̲e̲c̲a̲u̲s̲e̲ ̲o̲f the food and when it was the p̲r̲a̲y̲’̲s̲ ̲t̲i̲m̲e̲ they had a special clothing. Just a̲s̲ ̲t̲h̲e̲ ̲w̲e̲e̲k̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ ̲p̲a̲s̲s̲i̲n̲g̲ /the time went by I c̶a̶u̶g̶h̶t̶ ̶f̶a̶m̶i̶l̶i̶a̶r̶i̶t̶y̶ familiarize myself with them and when the week finished I had four more friends.
Now, the next week they will come to my house f̶o̶r̶ to learn all my customs.
Ángela Olcina Sala
ResponderEliminarBolshoi acid attack
On 17 January, sulphuric acid was thrown at Bolshoi artistic director Sergei Filin outside his flat in Moscow. The attack was organised by Bolshoi Ballet solist Pavel Dmitrichenko because of tensions and rivality inside the company dancers wanting solo roles.
Due to the acid attack, Sergei Fillin has had over 20 operations to save his eyes. "The pain was immense and instant" he revealed.
Yuri Zarustky admitted that he threw the acid to Mr Fillin's face and that it was his idea. The third accused, Andrei Lipatov, was the one who drove Zarustky to the artistic director's flat.
Pavel Dmitrichenko was condemned to six years of jail. The other two accused were condemned to ten and four years of jail, respectively.
Interesting topic, Aila! Very original...
EliminarBolshoi acid attack
On 17 January, sulphuric acid w̲a̲s̲ ̲t̲h̲r̲o̲w̲n̲ at Bolshoi artistic director Sergei Filin outside his flat in Moscow. The attack w̲a̲s̲ ̲o̲r̲g̲a̲n̲i̲s̲e̲d̲ ̲b̲y̲ Bolshoi Ballet solist Pavel Dmitrichenko b̲e̲c̲a̲u̲s̲e̲ ̲o̲f̲ tensions and r̶i̶v̶a̶l̶i̶t̶y̶ rivalry inside the company dancers wanting solo roles.
D̲u̲e̲ ̲t̲o̲ the acid attack, Sergei Fillin has had over 20 operations to save his eyes. "The pain was immense and instant" he revealed. (Reported Speech!)
Yuri Zarustky admitted that he threw the acid to Mr Fillin's face and that it was his idea. The third accused, Andrei Lipatov, (was the one who) drove Zarustky to the artistic director's flat.
Pavel Dmitrichenko w̲a̲s̲ ̲c̲o̲n̲d̲e̲m̲n̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲o̲ six years of jail. The other two accused were condemned to ten and four years of jail, respectively.
Jesús Tercero
ResponderEliminarA surprise for students
Last week, the school "El Palmeral" welcome with open arms Rubén Pérez, one of the best soccer players of Elche C.F. An act to encourage the sport with younger children.
In the school Ruben gave some workouts about football, he said that see the face of these excite children was one of the reason why he went. He prepared some games for the childrens and some excercises. The teacher said that
when the children saw ruben perez everyone was surprised a lot.
The experience was very good for all, the childrens said that they were very happy with the surprise, because Rubén Pérez is a good player.
Last week, the school "El Palmeral" w̶e̶l̶c̶o̶m̶e̶ welcomed [with open arms] Rubén Pérez, one of the b̶e̶s̶t̶ ̶s̶o̶c̶c̶e̶r̶ ̶p̶l̶a̶y̶e̶r̶s̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶E̶l̶c̶h̶e̶ ̶C̶.̶F̶.̶ Elche C.F. best soccer players. An act to encourage t̶h̶e̶ ̶s̶p̶o̶r̶t̶ ̶w̶i̶t̶h̶ sport in younger children.
EliminarIn the school R̶u̶b̶e̶n̶ Rubén gave some workouts about football, he said that see the face of these e̶x̶c̶i̶t̶e̶ excited children was one of the r̶e̶a̶s̶o̶n̶ reasons why he went. He prepared some games for t̶h̶e̶ ̶c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶s̶ children and some excercises. The teacher said that when t̶h̶e̶ ̶c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶ children saw r̶u̶b̶e̶n̶ ̶p̶e̶r̶e̶z̶ Rubén Pérez everyone was s̶u̶r̶p̶r̶i̶s̶e̶d̶ ̶a̶ ̶l̶o̶t̶ really surprised.
The experience was very good for all, t̶h̶e̶ ̶c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶s̶ children said that they were very happy with the surprise, because Rubén Pérez is a good player.
Very original, Jesús, thanks! Good corrections, Manu!
EliminarLast week, the school "El Palmeral" w̶e̶l̶c̶o̶m̶e̶ welcomed w̲i̲t̲h̲ ̲o̲p̲e̲n̲ ̲a̲r̲m̲s̲ Rubén Pérez, one of the b̶e̶s̶t̶ ̶s̶o̶c̶c̶e̶r̶ ̶p̶l̶a̶y̶e̶r̶s̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶E̶l̶c̶h̶e̶ ̶C̶.̶F̶.̶ Elche C.F. best soccer players. An act to e̲n̲c̲o̲u̲r̲a̲g̲e̲ t̶h̶e̶ ̶s̶p̶o̶r̶t̶ ̶w̶i̶t̶h̶ sport i̲n̲ younger children.
In the school R̶u̶b̶e̶n̶ Rubén gave some workouts/TRAINING about football, he said that seeING the face of t̶h̶e̶s̶e̶ ̶e̶̶̶x̶̶̶c̶̶̶i̶̶̶t̶̶̶e̶̶̶ those excited children was one of the r̶e̶a̶s̶o̶n̶ reasons why he went. He prepared some games for the c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶s̶ children and some excercises. The teacher said that when the c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶ children saw r̶u̶b̶e̶n̶ ̶p̶e̶r̶e̶z̶ Rubén Pérez everyone was s̶u̶r̶p̶r̶i̶s̶e̶d̶ ̶a̶ ̶l̶o̶t̶ r̲e̲a̲l̲l̲y̲ surprised.
The experience was very good for all, the c̶h̶i̶l̶d̶r̶e̶n̶s̶ children said that they were very happy with the surprise, because Rubén Pérez i̶s̶ was a good player.
A bad day
ResponderEliminarIt was a difficult day for e̶n̶g̶l̶i̶s̶h̶ English people, an earthquake had hit the city leaving lots of people homeless. There were about 300 p̶e̶r̶s̶o̶n̶ people dead. People wanted to know why p̶e̶o̶p̶l̶e̶ authorities didn´t notice them. The police said that they had a p̶r̶o̶b̶l̶e̶m̶a̶ problem and they were very embarassed.
People were very disappointed, however they d̶i̶c̶e̶d̶e̶d̶ decided to help everybody who was more unfortunate and t̶r̶y̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶o̶u̶t̶ try to get out of this situation which was very difficult. This is an exemple of very brave people. There was a person who wanted to express his feelings, he said that he was very sad but prepared to fight
Because of the fight of all this people, this news really like me and I would really recomended it to teach the courage of this people.
Thanks Álvaro for your writing! Thanks Pablo for your accurate corrections! Here are mines:
ResponderEliminarIt was a difficult day for e̶n̶g̶l̶i̶s̶h̶ English people (WHERE?), an earthquake h̶a̶d̶ hit the city leaving lots of people homeless. There were about 300 p̶e̶r̶s̶o̶n̶ dead people . People wanted to know why p̶e̶o̶p̶l̶e̶ authorities d̶i̶d̶n̶'̶t̶ hadn't noticeD them. The police said that they had a p̶r̶o̶b̶l̶e̶m̶a̶ problem and they were very embarassed.
People were very disappointed, however they d̶i̶c̶e̶d̶e̶d̶ decided to help everybody who was more unfortunate and t̶r̶y̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶o̶u̶t̶ t̶r̶y̶ tried to get out of t̶h̶a̶t̶ situation w̲h̲i̲c̲h̲ was very difficult. This is an exemple of very brave people. T̲h̲e̲r̲e̲ ̲w̲a̲s̲ ̲a̲ ̲p̲e̲r̲s̲o̲n̲ ̲w̲h̲o̲ ̲w̲a̲n̲t̲e̲d̲ ̲t̲o̲ ̲e̲x̲p̲r̲e̲s̲s̲ ̲h̲i̲s̲ ̲f̲e̲e̲l̲i̲n̲g̲s̲,̲ he said that he was very sad but prepared to fight.
Because of the fight of all t̶h̶i̶s̶ these people, t̶h̶i̶s̶ ̶n̶e̶w̶s̶ ̶r̶e̶a̶l̶l̶y̶ ̶l̶i̶k̶e̶ ̶m̶e̶ (!!!!) I really like this (piece of) news and I would really r̶e̶c̶o̶m̶e̶n̶d̶e̶d̶ recommend it to teach the courage of t̶h̶i̶s̶ these people/THESE PEOPLE'S COURAGE.